It was late, and I was longing for some company, and then finally she came in.
She must of thought that I wanted sex but all I wanted was company that all. I don't blame her for being weary I would be if I was in her situation.
We played an intellectual game of scrabble, it was fun however, I could sense fear in her. I don't blame her but I'm harmless, it's my obsessive and strong willed wife who she needs to afraid of.
However, I know what I'm doing now, I have to be careful and more secretive to ensure that Serena does not find out.
WWW - Sums up what's happening well and directly
ReplyDeleteEBI - Could have been a bit longer maybe
WWW - Its direct and to the point! Shows the Commanders inner feelings!
ReplyDeleteEBI- you added more detail
www: the feelings of the Commander is revealed in detail
ReplyDeleteebi: could have been a bit longer
Good start but too brief - you could have got more from this if you had written more.
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